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    (No One's POV) Long ago, two villagers visited each other from their villages, only to be met by the woman known as Arabella, the Queen of the White Rose Kingdom

She stared at each one of them, and finally, after a long pause, asked, "What are your names??"

"I am Amarante of the Gold Rose Kingdom," replied the woman with a scared tone.

"And I am Cadmus of the Silver Rose Kingdom," the man finally answered after the woman.

Arabella nodded and said, "Amarante, you are destined to lead the Gold Rose Kingdom, since you have inherited your golden hair from your mother." Arabella then turned to Cadmus and said, "And you, Cadmus, will lead the Silver Rose Kingdom for inheriting your silver eyes from your father."

Amarante and Cadmus glared at each other with a confused look and, together, asked, "But why us? Why not the leaders of our village??"

"Your leaders came from the Black Rose Village," she answered, only causing them to flinch in fear. "I know that this may not be true, but you must believe me. Your kings are the infamous Devil twins, Mercury and Mercurius, who killed your leaders out of greed and power."

Once Arabella explained the past, Amarante-after a long, bitter silence-said, "How do we stop such monsters from destroying our kingdoms, then?!"

"Easy," Arabella replied with a soft, sympathetic smile on her face, "I want you to find people who hates their kings in their kingdom and ask them to help you cause a riot and take back your throne as Queen of the Gold Rose Kingdom and King of the Silver Rose Kingdom."

"How, exactly?" Cadmus asked in a persistent tone, as if he could trust this mysterious woman.

"On the ides of May," she began, holding out a rose, "you must walk into their kingdom and pierce their hearts with this white rose. Afterwards, I want you two to go out into your villages and say 'I have slain the tyrant! I am the reincarnation of the true Kings of the Villages!'"

Amarante and Cadmus nodded and agreed to the plan.

On the Ides of May, Amarante and Cadmus-at the same time-went into their kingdoms and pierced Mercury and Mercurius's heart with the White Rose, as Arabella said to do, and walked out to their villages and proclaimed, "I have slain the tyrant! I am the reincarnation of the true Kings of the Villages!"

As soon as they said this, the crowds gather around them and chanted, "Long live the king!"

As days turn into months, several more kingdoms appeared in the land of Rosarion. These kingdoms were Red, Orange, Yellow, Green, Blue, Purple, and Pink. One day, though, a tribe suddenly appeared. This tribe had a darker aura and lived in a cave. The village's name? The Black Rose Tribe.

Ever since the tribe appeared, Amarante and Cadmus vanished without a trace, along with the Gold and Silver Kingdoms. Legend has it, they were killed by the ghost of Mercury and Mercurius, but there were more rumors that the Black Rose kidnapped them and murdered them in cold blood for killing their tyrant and destroying the darkness of the land.

Now, in the year 200, the Rose Kingdoms are at war against the Black Rose Kingdom. This war could probably destroy Rosarion, but that is where two nobles-a princess from the Purple Rose Kingdom and the Prince of the Red Rose Kingdom-will meet each other for the destiny of their lives...
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This is my story that I created myself! This story belongs to me! I hope you like it!

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~CrystalGrim Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The legend sounds very interesting ^^ I wish you good luck with this story :D the prologue is really awesome ;D
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*QueenOfNightmares21 Nov 30, 2012  Student Artist
Thanks. I'm planning on making changes to it, though. ^^
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~CrystalGrim Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah, Itīs really good, but if you want to chage some things itīs fine too XD Iīm sure it will be even better than now XD :iconrubcheeksplz:
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*QueenOfNightmares21 Dec 1, 2012  Student Artist
Kk.

Thanks. :iconninjaglompplz:
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~NicolaiGrey Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
interesting, but i'm sorry i need to go gramma nazi on this - a result of having a slightly abusive editor - when a new character enters a conversation put it n=on a new line, it makes it flow a bit better. thats the only problem i had with it, it was an interesting story.
And i'm not trying to be mean with this i'm just offering some constructive critacism.
keep writing, its really interesting. ^_^
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*QueenOfNightmares21 Sep 6, 2012  Student Artist
Thank you, and thanks for the advice! It's my first story, and I need any advice that can help me. :) :hug: So... How do you put the new character on a new line when they're in a conversation (I'm a bit... slow on these types of things. Please forgive me. ^^;)?
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~NicolaiGrey Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
like so.

Amanda walked down the empty corridor her mind racing through everything that had happened this last evening. "What do i do?" she asked herself. Not knowing what to do.
"The answer is simple." A voice said from behind her.

Thats really all you need to do. start a new line when
A) another person enters a conversation.
B) if two or more people are talking just put each person on a new line, making sure to say who it is, before or after they speak.

I hoped this helped.
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*QueenOfNightmares21 Sep 6, 2012  Student Artist
Oh~! Okay, I get it now! Thanks for the advice! I'll use it.
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~NicolaiGrey Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you are most welcome and i look forward to much more of your work ^_^
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*QueenOfNightmares21 Sep 6, 2012  Student Artist
Thank you, once again. :) :tighthug:
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